The other night, I saw Robert Pinsky
(poet laureate of the United States, 1997 -2000) talk about poetry on The
News Hour with Jim Lehrer. Charming, engaging and passionate, he
talked most particularly of his love of music and the importance of rhyme and
tonality in poetry. As well, we saw a clip of Pinsky reading his poems with a
live jazz band – his voice like another instrument riffing right along with the
clarinet and the saxophone.
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"Samurai Song" by Robert Pinsky
When I had no roof I made
Audacity my roof. When I had
No supper my eyes dined.
When I had no eyes I listened.
When I had no ears I thought.
When I had no thought I waited.
When I had no father I made
Care my father. When I had
No mother I embraced order.
When I had no friend I made
Quiet my friend. When I had no
Enemy I opposed my body.
When I had no temple I made
My voice my temple. I have
No priest, my tongue is my choir.
When I have no means fortune
Is my means. When I have
Nothing, death will be my fortune.
Need is my tactic, detachment
Is my strategy. When I had
No lover I courted my sleep.
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I hear the music in Pinsky’s work.
Notice Pinsky’s repetition of “When I” at the beginning of each
paragraph. Read the poem aloud and you will see that this
powerful and lyrical language, this repetition pulls you into the poem.
It’s what Jack Grapes calls “a sung verse… public voice, meant to rouse and
inspire.” Mary Oliver uses the same voice in How Would You Live Then?
--repeating “What if” and achieving a similar reaction in the listener. Read the
poem aloud and you will feel the effects of the rhythm of repetition of What
if.”
How would you live then?
What if a hundred rose-breasted
grosbeaks
flew in
circles around your head?
What if the mockingbird came into the
house with you and
became your
advisor?
What if the bees filled your walls
with honey and all
you needed
to do was ask them and they would fill
the bowl?
What if the brook slid downhill just
past your
bedroom window so you could listen
to its slow
prayers as you fell asleep?
What if you painted a picture of a
tree, and the leaves
began to
rustle, and a bird cheerfully sang
from its
painted branches?
What if you suddenly saw that the
silver of water was brighter than the silver
of
money?
What if you finally saw that the
sunflowers, turning toward the sun all day
and every
day --- who knows how, but they do it ---were
more precious, more
meaningful than gold?
Exercise: Repeating
the phrase "When I "' or “What if” build a series of sentences
that, due to the repetition of “When I” or “What if," become an
incantation. Vary the length of the sentences. For example,
"When I think of gin, I grin. When I think of gin and grin, I reach
for the bottle.” Or, “What if I wrote the poem that’s been living
in me all these years. What if it got published? What if I had to go the
publishing party and I had no dress. What if I went naked” Of course, I’m
am trying to be funny to lighten the burden here, but this is serious and
valuable stuff.
Think of Martin Luther King's "I have a
dream" speech. He repeats the phrase many times, varying the length
of the sentences. You can go serious with your tone, like Oliver and
King, or be lighthearted, talking about chocolate ice cream for example. It's
the exercise that counts. It's the rhythm and tone of your writing that will be
the incantation.